If you are going to save up some money for something, what would it be and why?

2021-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I want to buy my own house especially in seoul. The prices of buildings in seoul increase every year deeply. so I want to buy it as soon as possible. if I have a job, I loan the money and buy house. That\'s more efficient than saving money.

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Hi [이름]! Investing in a house is very good especially for your future. Keep it up!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I want to buy my own house especially in seoul.
>> I want to buy my own house especially in Seoul.

The prices of buildings in seoul increase every year deeply.
>> The prices of buildings in Seoul increase every year deeply so I want to buy one as soon as possible.

so I want to buy it as soon as possible.
>>CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.

if I have a job, I loan the money and buy house.
>> If I have a job, I will loan some money and buy a house.

That\'s more efficient than saving money.
>> CORRECT

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