If you are to build a new Company of your own, what kind of company would you make or what kind of p

2015-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Indeed, it’s time for me to seriously think about running my own business as part of my retirement plan because time will come to be forced out of the company in the near future. It is highly unlikely for you to get hired after retirement when you reach 50 or older, no matter how well qualified and skilled you are. Once you are getting older, you don’t have many chances in selecting your job, so that many people end up seeking a self-employed job. If I started my own business, I would work for auto parts trading, focusing on imported vehicles. The business model is to import auto parts from abroad and distribute in the domestic market. The imported vehicles have been increasing rapidly, which requires fast and inexpensive service parts supply. The key challenge is sales. To whom and how should I sell the auto parts. Should I directly engage in retail business or wholesale only? When I concentrate on wholesale, my customers will be independent auto repair shops or parts wholesalers.

강사 첨삭

Happy Tuesday Sir [이름]!

How are you?

It is still raining in my city today.

I guess there will be two more typhoons that might hit our country.

Anyway, I am excited for you.

I think you business will be really successful.

It is because you are really knowledgeable about that.

Can\'t wait to hear more of your plans.

Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina


Indeed, it’s time for me to seriously think about running my own business as part of my retirement plan because time will come to be forced out of the company in the near future.

>> Indeed, it’s time for me to seriously think about running my own business as part of my retirement plan because time will come that I will be forced out of the company in the near future. 

It is highly unlikely for you to get hired after retirement when you reach 50 or older, no matter how well qualified and skilled you are.

>> correct

>> OR: It is highly unlikely for you to get hired after retirement when you reach 50 or older, no matter how competent you are.

Once you are getting older, you don’t have many chances in selecting your job, so that many people end up seeking a self-employed job. 

>> Once you are getting older, you don’t have many chances in selecting your job, so many people end up seeking a self-employed job. 

If I started my own business, I would work for auto parts trading, focusing on imported vehicles.

>> correct

The business model is to import auto parts from abroad and distribute in the domestic market.

>> correct

The imported vehicles have been increasing rapidly, which requires fast and inexpensive service parts supply.

>> correct

The key challenge is sales.

>> correct

To whom and how should I sell the auto parts.

>> correct

Should I directly engage in retail business or wholesale only?

>> correct

When I concentrate on wholesale, my customers will be independent auto repair shops or parts wholesalers.

>> correct

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