If you are to live another life, what would you choose and why?

2019-11-22 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

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If i can live another life, i would like to be sports star such as JI-Sung Park. I sometimes dream that becoming a sports star like Ji Sung Park. because, when i was started to watching sports as a soccer, Park was most popular soccer player in Korea. He is also known for his personality. So, i was sometimes imagined to become him. if i can be Park, I will enjoy his reputation and popularity. Besides, if I have his athletic ability, I want to play soccer with my friends. He also does a lot of volunteer work like a charity event, and I really want to participate. It\'s possible to dream of who i\'m going to be, but i can\'t. But i think, I admire someone who can even resemble a good thing for me.

강사 첨삭

Good luck my dear!!

If i can live another life, i would like to be sports star such as JI-Sung Park.
>> If I can live another life, I would like to be a sports star like JI-Sung Park.
  
I sometimes dream that becoming a sports star like Ji Sung Park. because, when i was started to watching sports as a soccer, Park was most popular soccer player in Korea. 
>> I sometimes dream of becoming a sports star like Ji Sung Park because, when I started to watching sports like soccer, he was the most popular soccer player in Korea. 

He is also known for his personality.  
>> Correct. 
  
So, i was sometimes imagined to become him. if i can be Park, I will enjoy his reputation and popularity.  
>> So, I sometimes imagined to become a person like him. If I can be like Park, I will enjoy his reputation and popularity.  
  
Besides, if I have his athletic ability, I want to play soccer with my friends.  
>> And also, if I have his athletic ability, I want to play soccer with my friends.  
  
He also does a lot of volunteer work like a charity event, and I really want to participate. 
>> He also does a lot of volunteer work like charity events, and I really want to participate in one of those. 
  
It\'s possible to dream of who i\'m going to be, but i can\'t.  
>> It\'s possible to dream of who I\'m going to be, but I can\'t.  
  
But i think, I admire someone who can even resemble a good thing for me. 
>> But I think, I admire someone who can resembles as good man for me.
  

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