If you are to start a business, what would that be and why?
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I am not drastic about business so if I am starting my business, I will have a lot of money in that situation.
And if I earned a lot of money, I will use that money for the poor or the children who are not able to learn.
Because as I said before, I will start my business if I have a lot of money, so I will have enough money.
Then getting too much money for living is just a luxury so I will use the money for the poor and the children.
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Hi [이름]! ^^
The best option is always to make or sell a product or service that you know about and love. If you’re looking for someplace to score a short-term hit just for the sake of reaping a financial gain, that’s fine – get in; make your money; and get out. But if you’re looking to start a business for the long haul that suits your temperament, your strengths and the lifestyle you want, you must choose a business that you love. Your answer is very selfless. Keep it up :)
I am not drastic about business so if I am starting my business, I will have a lot of money in that situation.
>> I am not drastic about business so if I am going to start my business, I will need to have a lot of money.
And if I earned a lot of money, I will use that money for the poor or the children who are not able to learn.
>> CORRECT
Because as I said before, I will start my business if I have a lot of money, so I will have enough money.
>> Because as I said before, I will start my business if I have a lot of money.
Then getting too much money for living is just a luxury so I will use the money for the poor and the children.
>> Having too much money is just a luxury so I will just use it to help the poor and children in need.
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