If you can change one of your personalities, what would it be and why?

2021-11-30 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Actually, I don\'t want to change my personalities. Before, I thought that some of my personalities are bad so I have to change them. But now, I think I fixed some of them, and I think that my personalities are great so I don\'t need to change them. I made a lot of friends because of my personalities, so I don\'t need to change my personalities. What I have to do is keep my personalities and love my self. Also I think the attitude that loving our personalities is very important in our lives.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] :) 

That\'s true. Our personality defines who we are so we have to accept it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

Actually, I don\'t want to change my personalities.
>> CORRECT

Before, I thought that some of my personalities are bad so I have to change them.
>> CORRECT

But now, I think I fixed some of them, and I think that my personalities are great so I don\'t need to change them.
>> CORRECT

I made a lot of friends because of my personalities, so I don\'t need to change my personalities.
>> I made a lot of friends because of my personalities so I don\'t need to change them. 

What I have to do is keep my personalities and love my self.
>>  CORRECT

Also I think the attitude that loving our personalities is very important in our lives.
>> I also think that loving our personalities is very important in our lives. 

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