If you can change something about the government of South Korea, what would it be and why?
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I really want to change the welfare for military service. I experienced it and I know it well, the welfare of soldiers is a mess. And I don\'t think the social perception of them is very good either. Because soldiers think that the labor force is the cheapest in South Korea.
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I really want to change the welfare for military service.
>> I really want to change the welfare of military service.
I experienced it and I know it well, the welfare of soldiers is a mess.
>> I experienced it and I know it well. The welfare of soldiers is a mess.
And I don\'t think the social perception of them is very good either.
>> CORRECT
Because soldiers think that the labor force is the cheapest in South Korea.
>> It is because soldiers think that the labor force is the cheapest in South Korea.
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