If you can change something about your lifestyle, what would it be and why?
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If I can change something about my lifestyle, I would like to change a lot of things.
First of all, I’m a night owl. So, I want to be a morning person. When I wake up early, I can spend more time in the morning and start a day leisurely. I want to be more diligent and spend a day efficiently.
Next, I’m a picky eater. Although I don\'t like seafood and vegetables, I really enjoy eating meat. As I’m getting older, I think it’s getting better. However, I feel I have to try more than now.
Lastly, I tend to eat meals before I’m starving. I have a lot of appetite. Because of these, I often tend to have an upset stomach. I don\'t really want to feel this trouble so I try to eat something when I feel hungry.
As I mentioned, I want to change these things. If I change them, I would be a healthier and fabulous person.
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Hi [이름]!
These changes can really change your lifestyle more efficiently. I hope you will be successful in doing so.
If I can change something about my lifestyle, I would like to change a lot of things.
First of all, I’m a night owl s
Next, I’m a picky eater.
Lastly, I tend to eat meals before I’m starving.
As I mentioned, I want to change these things.
>> CORRECT
First of all, I’m a night owl s
>>First of all, I’m a night owl so I want to be a morning person.
So, I want to be a morning person.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.
When I wake up early, I can spend more time in the morning and start a day leisurely.
>> CORRECT
I want to be more diligent and spend a day efficiently.
>> CORRECT
Next, I’m a picky eater.
>> CORRECT
Although I don\'t like seafood and vegetables, I really enjoy eating meat.
>> CORRECT
As I’m getting older, I think it’s getting better.
>>CORRECT
OR: As I get older, I think it’s getting better.
However, I feel I have to try more than now.
>> However, I feel I have to try more than before.
Lastly, I tend to eat meals before I’m starving.
>> CORRECT
I have a lot of appetite.
>> CORRECT
OR: I have a big appetite.
Because of these, I often tend to have an upset stomach.
>> CORRECT
I don\'t really want to feel this trouble so I try to eat something when I feel hungry.
>> I don\'t really want to experience this trouble so I try to eat something when I feel hungry.
As I mentioned, I want to change these things.
>> CORRECT
If I change them, I would be a healthier and fabulous person.
>> If I change them, I would be a healthier and fabulous person.
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