If you can change something about your lifestyle, what would it be and why?

2022-04-26 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can change something about my lifestyle, than I want to exercise more. Nowadays, I have to prepare about a lot of exams, and also I have so many things to learn. Because of these reasons, I have to study a lot. And because of this, I don\'t have enough time to exercise a lot. But I want to make a stronger body, and then I need to exercise a lot. So I want to make some times that I can exercise freely in my lifestyle.

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Hi [이름]!

These changes can really change your lifestyle more efficiently. I hope you will be successful in doing so.

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If I can change something about my lifestyle, than I want to exercise more.

>> If I can change something about my lifestyle, it would be exercising more.

Nowadays, I have to prepare about a lot of exams, and also I have so many things to learn.

>> Nowadays, I have to prepare for a lot of exams, and I have so many things to learn.

Because of these reasons, I have to study a lot.

>> Because of these reasons, I have to study a lot and I have less time to exercise.

And because of this, I don\'t have enough time to exercise a lot.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.

But I want to make a stronger body, and then I need to exercise a lot.

>> But I want to make my body stronger so I need to exercise a lot.

So I want to make some times that I can exercise freely in my lifestyle.

>> This is why I want to make more time to exercise freely in my lifestyle.

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