If you can change something in the culture in South Korea, what would it be and why?
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In South Korea, we usually respect for older people because they have a lot of age. But I think that is not good culture. Because I know that there are a lot of great people who already got a lot of age but there are some people who just want to be respect from the other people even they did nothing or bad things.So I think our culture should be changed into respecting all guy without getting age.
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Korea\'s culture is actually great. But like any other cultures, it also has flaws. Some people want to prolong it and some don\'t. It is always different based on people\'s perspectives.
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In South Korea, we usually respect for older people because they have a lot of age.
>> In South Korea, we usually respect the elderly people.
But I think that is not good culture.
>> CORRECT
Because I know that there are a lot of great people who already got a lot of age but there are some people who just want to be respect from the other people even they did nothing or bad things.
>> There are a lot of elderly people who did a lot great things but there are some who still want to be respected because of their age regardless if they did something bad or did nothing.
So I think our culture should be changed into respecting all guy without getting age.
>> So I think this culture of ours should be changed to respect the ones that are worth respected to.
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