If you can have a big birthday party, how do you want it to be and who are you going to invite?
학생이 쓴 원문
Actullay, I don\'t have many friends. so even if I have a big birthday party, I just invite 6 friends. after then, I\'ll do barbeque party. we burn charcoal with torch and grill meat. In the past, whenever I had a birthday party, I always invited all of classmate in my school, so many friend came to my house. probably, I proud of me depend on how many friends come to my house. I was so young. when I was grower, my range of relationship is more narrow. I think my friends who I meet now are my best friends in my life. Don\'t get me wrong way. I want to invite my family but I don\'t want to invite my family and my friends at the same time. I just want to be celebrated separately.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Yes, there are a lot advantages and disadvantages in having big birthday parties. It just differs based on what the person like. Some like it big and some like it just to be intimate but I think both are okay just as long as the celebrant is happy. Your party on the other hand sounds fun :)
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Actullay, I don\'t have many friends. so even if I have a big birthday party, I just invite 6 friends. after then, I\'ll do barbeque party.
>> Actually, I don\'t have many friends so if I\'m going to have a big birthday party, I will just invite 6 of my friends and have a barbeque party.
we burn charcoal with torch and grill meat.
>> We will burn charcoal and grill meat.
In the past, whenever I had a birthday party, I always invited all of classmate in my school, so many friend came to my house.
>> In the past, whenever I had a birthday party, I always invited all of classmate in my school, so many of my friends came to my house.
probably, I proud of me depend on how many friends come to my house.
>> I was proud of how any friends I had over.
I was so young. when I was grower, my range of relationship is more narrow.
>>I was so young that time but as I got older, my circle of friends got more narrow and narrow.
I think my friends who I meet now are my best friends in my life.
>> I think the friends that I have now are my best friends for life.
Don\'t get me wrong way.
>> Don\'t get me the wrong way.
I want to invite my family but I don\'t want to invite my family and my friends at the same time.
>>I want to invite my family but I don\'t want to invite them and my friends at the same time.
I just want to be celebrated separately.
>> I just want to be celebrate separately.
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