If you can have your own business, what would it be and why?

2022-03-05 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can have my own business, Korean traditional foods would become my business item. I will sell Korean traditional foods in abroad because I want to tell foreigners their tastes. Also, I want to recommend them to try various kinds of Korean traditional dishes because some Korean traditional foods are good for our health and delicious. I think that if I behave like these, clearly, they will be liked Korean traditional foods.

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Hi Kimberly! 

That a very promising business. I would be your number 1 customer since I love Korean traditional food. :) 

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If I can have my own business, Korean traditional foods would become my business item. 
>> If I can have my own business, I want to sell Korean traditional foods. 

I will sell Korean traditional foods in abroad because I want to tell foreigners their tastes. 
>> I will sell Korean traditional foods abroad because I want to let foreigners taste them. 

Also, I want to recommend them to try various kinds of Korean traditional dishes because some Korean traditional foods are good for our health and delicious. 
>> Also, I want to recommend them to try various kinds of Korean traditional dishes because most of them are delicious and healthy. 

I think that if I behave like these, clearly, they will be liked Korean traditional foods.
>> I think that if I behave like this, they will like Korean traditional foods. 

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