If you can make a law, what would it be and why?

2021-09-29 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can make a law, I want to get rid of all kinds of taxes on children\'s products. Many kinds of children\'s products are very expensive and they include the same taxes as adult items. I think this benefit is essential for children. If so, parents raising children are also less burdened, and it will help to increase the population. Because depopulation is now a serious social problem in many courntries.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jennifer! :)

Rules are established to protect the weaker class in the society since they are at a disadvantage if such regulations are broken. When rules are properly set and followed, they provide a stable environment and human co-existence in a community, resulting in peace and order. 

I think your suggestion is good. :) 

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If I can make a law, I want to get rid of all kinds of taxes on children\'s products.
>> CORRECT

Many kinds of children\'s products are very expensive and they include the same taxes as adult items.
>> CORRECT

I think this benefit is essential for children.
>> I think this would benefit parents in terms of essentials for children. 

If so, parents raising children are also less burdened, and it will help to increase the population.
>>If so, parents raising children are also less burdened, and it will help increase the population.

Because depopulation is now a serious social problem in many courntries.
>>  It is because the population now is decreasing which is a serious social problem in many countries. 

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