If you can make your own holiday, what would it be? When should it be celebrated and why?

2021-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can make my own holiday, I want to watch a lot of movies and I will celebrate it at one day on a vacation. I love to watch a lot of movie but I watched almost interesting movies that are allowed to my age. So I want to watch more movies that I didn\'t watched and I want to find interesting genre to me. Actually I have a few movies that I want to watch but almost them are not allowed to my age or unopened. And the reason that I want to celebrate this holiday at one day of a vacation is there is a lot of time when it is vacation. And because of vacation, my friends can play a lot of time so I want to celebrate this holiday on a vacation.

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Hi [이름]! ^^

Wow! That\'s a great choice! I think that would be a great holiday that you will enjoy.

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If I can make my own holiday, I want to watch a lot of movies and I will celebrate it at one day on a vacation.

>> If I can make my own holiday, I want to watch a lot of movies and I will celebrate it on a one day vacation.

I love to watch a lot of movie but I watched almost interesting movies that are allowed to my age.

>> I love to watch a lot of movies but I watch most interesting movies that are allowed for my age.

So I want to watch more movies that I didn\'t watched and I want to find interesting genre to me.

>>So I want to watch more movies that I haven\'t watched and I want to find interesting genres for me.

Actually I have a few movies that I want to watch but almost them are not allowed to my age or unopened.

>> Actually, I have a few movies that I want to watch but most of them are not allowed for my age.

And the reason that I want to celebrate this holiday at one day of a vacation is there is a lot of time when it is vacation.

>> The reason why I want to go on a one day vacation is that there is a lot of time when we are resting.

And because of vacation, my friends can play a lot of time so I want to celebrate this holiday on a vacation.

>> And because of that, I can play with my friends. This is why I want to celebrate this holiday on a vacation.

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