If you can make your own holiday, what would it be? When should it be celebrated and why?

2021-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I want to make my own holiday, Yoon\'s day. So, It is Sep 7th. It is a holiday that celebrate my birth! If you ask me why I want to make this holiday, because I want to take a rest or hang out with my friends on my birthday.

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Hi [이름]! ^^

Wow! That\'s a great choice! I think that would be a great holiday that you will enjoy.

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I want to make my own holiday, Yoon\'s day.

>> CORRECT

So, It is Sep 7th.

>> So it should be on the 7th of September.

It is a holiday that celebrate my birth!

>> It is a holiday that celebrates my birth!

If you ask me why I want to make this holiday, because I want to take a rest or hang out with my friends on my birthday.

>> If you ask me why I want to make this holiday it\'s because I want to take a rest or hang out with my friends on my birthday.

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