If you can plant a tree in your name, what tree will you plant?

2022-04-06 · 첨삭 강사 Violet

학생이 쓴 원문

I want to plant an apple tree in my name because nobody hates an apple, everyone likes the flavor and the taste of an apple. So do I. I want to plant a tree that is loved by many people. I like an apple for its sharing harvests. It can share its plentiful harvests with others. Hungry birds can make do with an apple while taking a break on the branch. I like an apple for its benefits. The proverb, \"An apple a day keeps the doctor away\", addresses the supposed health benefits of the fruit, and so does the fruit have many benefits. I like an apple for its beauty. I think an apple is one of the most beautiful fruits in the world. Isn\'t it beautiful enough to attract Eve to eat it? When I see a red-cheeked apple displayed on the market, I feel a strong impulse to eat it as Eve might have felt desired to see the forbidden fruit very very long time ago. In short, I think an apple tree deserves to be planted in my name and an apple tree can represent me well.

강사 첨삭

Hey Steve!

Wow! An apple tree! You were thinking about the benefits and generosity of an apple! I am only thinking about the aesthetic of my tree. I wanted a Narra tree or a golden shower tree because their blooms are beautiful.

Anyway, today\'s work is so close to perfect! As you can see, we need \'a\' for \'a long time ago\'. Other than that it had been splendid and well written!

I am really pleased! Thank you :)
-Teacher Violet

I want to plant an apple tree in my name because nobody hates an apple, everyone likes the flavor and the taste of an apple.

>> CORRECT!

So do I.

>> CORRECT!

I want to plant a tree that is loved by many people.

>> CORRECT!

I like an apple for its sharing harvests.

>> CORRECT!

It can share its plentiful harvests with others.

>> CORRECT!

Hungry birds can make do with an apple while taking a break on the branch.

>> CORRECT! (Very good using \"make do\")

I like an apple for its benefits.

>> CORRECT!

The proverb, \"An apple a day keeps the doctor away\", addresses the supposed health benefits of the fruit, and so does the fruit have many benefits.

>> CORRECT!

I like an apple for its beauty.

>> CORRECT!

I think an apple is one of the most beautiful fruits in the world.

>> CORRECT!

Isn\'t it beautiful enough to attract Eve to eat it?

>> CORRECT!

When I see a red-cheeked apple displayed on the market, I feel a strong impulse to eat it as Eve might have felt desired to see the forbidden fruit very very long time ago.

>> When I see a red-cheeked apple displayed on the market, I feel a strong impulse to eat it as Eve might have felt desired to see the forbidden fruit a very very long time ago.

In short, I think an apple tree deserves to be planted in my name and an apple tree can represent me well.

>> CORRECT!

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