If you can sell anything from your valuable things, what would it be and why?

2021-05-26 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can sell anything from my valuable things, I will sell my toys that I played when I was a kid. There is lots of toys that I played when I was a kid in my room. And now, I don\'t play with that toys anymore because I am arleady a students of middle school. So I don\'t need it, and my brother don\'t need it because he is a students of middle school next year. So if I can sell anything from my valuable things, I will sell my toys that I played when I was a kid.

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Wow, that\'s quite hard to do for some people. Very impressive :) 

As well as being useful, our possessions represent our extended selves. They provide a sense of past and tell us “who we are, where we have come from and perhaps where we are going.

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If I can sell anything from my valuable things, I will sell my toys that I played when I was a kid.
>> CORRECT

There is lots of toys that I played when I was a kid in my room.
>>There are lots of toys that I played with in my room when I was a kid.

And now, I don\'t play with that toys anymore because I am arleady a students of middle school.
>> And now, I don\'t play with them anymore because I am already in middle school.

So I don\'t need it, and my brother don\'t need it because he is a students of middle school next year.
>> Both me and my brother don\'t play with it anymore because we\'re both in middle school. 

So if I can sell anything from my valuable things, I will sell my toys that I played when I was a kid.
>> CORRECT

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