If you can spend a day with a famous person, who would you pick and why?
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I would like to spend a day with Jesus in the bible because I am eager to listen to his lectures in person. If I could have time with him, how would I feel? Would I follow easily him, unlike people in the bible? People in Jesus\' era didn’t believe what he said and did even though they saw many miracles from him. If I saw him and listened to him individually, I would likely be one of the extreme followers. I might feel like exploding my heart if I could spend time with him because I am in ecstasy upon meeting him in reality. I would join the miracle of five loves and two fish with which Jesus fed five thousand people. How happy I would be if I could eat that food from Jesus\' blessing. Even imagination makes me happy now.
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Hi [이름]:)
Great choice. :) I can see that you are a very faithful believer in Him. I am too. :)
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I would like to spend a day with Jesus in the bible because I am eager to listen to his lectures in person.
>> I would like to spend a day with Jesus, from the bible, because I am eager to listen to his lectures in person.
If I could have time with him, how would I feel?
>> CORRECT
Would I follow easily him, unlike people in the bible? People in Jesus\' era didn’t believe what he said and did even though they saw many miracles from him.
>> Would I follow him easily unlike the other people in the bible? People during that era didn\'t believe a word that he said even if they see a lot of miracles from him.
If I saw him and listened to him individually, I would likely be one of the extreme followers.
>> If I saw and listened to him personally, I would likely be one of his loyal followers.
I might feel like exploding my heart if I could spend time with him because I am in ecstasy upon meeting him in reality.
>> I might feel like my heart is exploding if I get the chance to spend some time with him because that is complete bliss.
I would join the miracle of five loves and two fish with which Jesus fed five thousand people.
>> CORRECT
How happy I would be if I could eat that food from Jesus\' blessing.
>> I would be so happy if I get the chance to eat the food upon Jesus\' blessing.
Even imagination makes me happy now.
>> Even imagining it makes me happy now.
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