If you could be another person for a day, who would you be?

2015-06-26 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

Actually I do not like who I am. There are too many things I do not like about myself. I want to be a person who is generous, patient, humorous, smart, and persistent. I am a bit short-tempered person. I am selfish. A role model I admire is my former boss. He always smiled and treated his team members fairly. He spoke up even to his boss for the sake of his team members. He was willing to allocate his valuable time to talk to his members about his performance, career development, even his/her personal matters. He was happy to teach his team members. He has never frowned at an employee even if they made mistakes. He used to sacrifice for his team members. He was so determined to achieve team goals. He was diligent and worked so effectively. He knew exactly who was a good leader. Not only at work, he was a good husband and excellent father of two daughters. When he came home after work, he cooked for his family and helped his daughter do homework and prepare for the exams.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]^^

I admire you for sharing a lot of things about you.

You entrust even some personal matters with me.

I appreciate it a lot. It is for keeps. ^.^

As far as I know, you are patient, humorous, smart, generous and so on,

To be honest, a wonderful person. ^^

Your family are fortunate to have you in their life.

You are a hard working person. ^.^

I admire you for that.

Thanks for being an inspiration to me.

I am learning a lot of things from you.

Hope that your offsite workshop will be successful.

Have a good weekend.

Teacher Nina


Actually I do not like who I am.

>> Correct

There are too many things I do not like about myself.

>> Correct  

I want to be a person who is generous, patient, humorous, smart, and persistent.

>> Correct

I am a bit short-tempered person.

>> Correct

I am selfish.

>> Correct

A role model I admire is my former boss.

>> My role model is my former boss.

>> OR: I admire my former boss.

He always smiled and treated his team members fairly.

>> Correct

He spoke up even to his boss for the sake of his team members.

>> Correct

He was willing to allocate his valuable time to talk to his members about his performance, career development, even his/her personal matters.

>> Correct

He was happy to teach his team members.

>> Correct

He has never frowned at an employee even if they made mistakes.

>> Correct

He used to sacrifice for his team members.

>> Correct

He was so determined to achieve team goals.

>> Correct

He was diligent and worked so effectively.

>> Correct

He knew exactly who was a good leader.

>> Correct

Not only at work, he was a good husband and excellent father of two daughters.

>> correct

>> OR: He was a good husband and excellent father to his two daughters.

When he came home after work, he cooked for his family and helped his daughter do homework and prepare for the exams.

>> Correct

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