If you could change one important thing about your homtown, what would you change?

My hometown is seoul, which is the biggest city in Korea. I have lived here for long time since I was a baby. As a child, for several years, I had lived in oother cities. But I have lived in Seoul for my most life. I love my hometown, but I want my hometown changed for some reasons. First of all, Seoul should be more leisurely and quiet. Seoul is too complex. There are lot of people in many reasons such as working and studying. For example, after graduation from high school, many students attend the university in seoul, because there are lots of high level university here in seoul. And there are lots of big companies in seoul, so they can have a chance to have a job here. In addition, most people who are linving in this city should be wamer. They are always very busy, so they don't care about others around them. They don't know who is living in their next door. If people become warmer and more relaxed, our city will be better than before, and they will be happier.

Hello there! Thank you for submitting a well-written essay..You sound like you really love your city. I hope that you can get the changes that you like especially that one where people should be more warm-hearted...You have made few mistakes and most of them are just on capitalization. Remember to also capitalize cities. Talk to you in class.. T. Jeny