<If you could change one thing about the world, what would it be? Why would you make this change?>

2016-12-16 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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When I can change one thing about the world. I want to change that we don't have any waste pollution material because when we have that things earth can be all with tresh when it is future. I want to help earth to get not sick . When I help earth my feel is really good . I don't know why the world make many trash it. But i know why korea has many trash because many people use things one time and go to trashcan . I don't use a disposable things Because I don't want to see earth is going trashcan. I want to protect earth so much. I have one request to any one that use many tresh the request is don't use many trash and don't use many disposable things. It is not only good to me . Eeryone will be happy when we don't have trash. We have to make clean earth! TEACHER TANK YOU TEACHING ME TODAY WELL ^^ [이름] ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!


Thank you for answering the composition topic for today. You did a good job but be more careful with your spelling and how you make sentences.

Have a happy weekend!


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==


When I can change one thing about the world. I want to change that we don\'t have any waste pollution material because when we have that things earth can be all with tresh
when it is future.

>> If I can change one thing about the world, it would be to get rid of all the pollution and waste so that the Earth would not be full of trash in the future.


I want to help earth to get not sick . When I help earth my feel is really good .

>> I want to help the Earth not get polluted because when I help the Earth, I feel good.


I don\'t know why the world make many trash it. But i know why korea has many trash because many people use things one time and go to trashcan .
I don\'t use a disposable things Because I don\'t want to see earth is going trashcan.

>> I\'m not sure why there is so much trash in the world but I know why Korea has so much trash. It\'s because many people use things that are disposable. I don\'t use disposable things because I don\'t want to contribute to the worsening garbage problem.


 I want to protect earth so much. I have one request to any one that use many tresh
the request is don\'t use many trash and don\'t use many disposable things. 

>> I want to protect the Earth so I would like to request  everyone to start using recyclable things to avoid having so much garbage.


 It is not only good to me . Eeryone will be happy when we don\'t have trash.
We have to make clean earth! 

>> It is not only for my benefit, but for the benefit of everyone. We have to make the Earth clean!                         

TEACHER TANK YOU TEACHING ME TODAY WELL ^^

>> Teacher, thank you for teaching me so well today ^^

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