If you could change one thing about your culture, what would it be?
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If I could change one thing about my culture in Korea, I would like to focus on improving mature civic awareness.
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People are becoming more selfish due to the fierce competition and prevalent materialism.
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Money and power speak louder than anything else.
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They do not regard highly the basic citizenship like respecting others, being polite, and not throwing away trashes on the streets.
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Not all the problems and social issues can be resolved by the state, and excessive dependence on state authorities only leads to more regulations.
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A country cannot operate properly without the participation and devotion of its citizens.
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However, in Korean society today, the citizenship devoted to the maintenance and development of the community has weakened.
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Extreme competition created a society of sand grains, where each member becomes increasingly selfish.
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Education and civic campaigns should emphasize “us”, not “me.”
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We are too much obsessed with how to excel over others, which ruins our lives.
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