If you could change one thing in this world, what would it be and why?

2017-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

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I would like to change myself. If I change myself, my friends will be changed. If my friends be changed. my hometown will be changed. If my hometown will be changed, my country will be changed. If my country will be changed, maybe the World will be changed in way, which I want to change. :)

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Lion!

Your answers are admirable.

It\'s nice to know that there are still people around who would like to change the world to be a better place.

We don\'t have to do anything major, every little things we do for our country counts.

As the saying goes, \"great things come from small beginnings\".


See you tonight!

Amanda ^-^

If you could change one thing in this world, what would it be and why?



I would like to change myself.

>> Correct.

>> OR: If I could change one thing in this world, I\'ll change something about myself.

 If I change myself, my friends will be changed.

>>  If I change myself, my friends will change.

>> OR: If I change for the better, my friends might change for the better, too.

 
 If my friends be changed. my hometown will be changed.

>> If my friends will change, my hometown will change.

>> OR: If my friends will change for the better, my hometown might change for the better, too.


 If my hometown will be changed, my country will be changed.

>> If my hometown will change for the better, my country might change for the better, too.


 If my country will be changed, maybe the World will be changed in way, which I want to change. :)

>> If my country will change, maybe the world will change in one way or another.

>> OR: If my country will change for the common good, maybe the world will change for the common good, too. I am hoping to change the world for the better, and I want to start with myself.

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