If you could choose a place to live in, where would it be and why?

2019-02-01 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

I want to live in Tailand. When i was a 26 years old, i have been to Bangkok, Tailand. There is a lot of kind people, delicious food. I can feel stable. In my sight, People of Tailand are diffrent from Korean. A lot of Korean is rash. But people of Tailand is not rash. When i will be old man, i want to go and live in Tailand with my family. I will be a happy without nervous.

강사 첨삭

Hello Yeong Seog! Thank you once again for this. I heard about the \"pali-pali\" culture in Korea, where people are always in a rush. I guess the reason why most retired people choose to live in the country side is because they want peace and quiet. I hope you get to live in Thailand when you retire.

- T. Beth

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I want to live in Tailand.

>>>  I want to live in Thailand.  

When i was a 26 years old, i have been to Bangkok, Tailand.

>>>  When I was 26 years old, I have been to Bangkok, Thailand.  

There is a lot of kind people, delicious food.

>>> There were a lot of kind people and delicious food.   

I can feel stable.

>>> CORRECT.

>>> OR: I could feel stable.   

In my sight, People of Tailand are diffrent from Korean.

>>> CORRECT.

>>> OR: From my point of view, Thai people are diffrent from Koreans.

A lot of Korean is rash.

>>> A lot of Korean are on a rush.   

But people of Tailand is not rash.

>>> OR:  But people of Tailand are not in a hurry. 

When i will be old man, i want to go and live in Tailand with my family.

>>>  When I will be an old man, I want to go and live in Tailand with my family.

>>> OR: When I retire,  I want to go live in Tailand with my family.

I will be a happy without nervous.

>>>  I will be happy without feeling nervous.

>>> OR: I will be happy without feeling anxious.


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