If you could create your perfect weekend. How would you spend your weekend and why?

2024-03-19 · 첨삭 강사 Ryka

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If I can create my weekend, I want to have a peaceful time without any disturbance like study. Firstly, I sleep so much and I get out of bed relaxed to take tiredness away. It should be a sunny day for picnic on the mat with some sandwiches and drinks. I listen to music a kind of Jazz or pop which my favorite one. If I go to picnic with someone, I make agreeable conversation or I watch a movie together. When it gets dark, I have a wonderful diner. The menu is steak with mash potato with elegant music ! After I finish my dinner, I head to mall for shopping like Jewelry, cosmetic and clothes because It makes me happy. Then, I go back home at 9 o\'clock.

강사 첨삭

Hey Sarah! It\'s good that you were able to share you idea about this topic. I know you\'re busy at school these days. Good job!
~~Teacher Ryka^^


If I can create my weekend, I want to have a peaceful time without any disturbance like study. 
>> If I could create my ideal weekend, I would want to have a peaceful time without any disturbances like studying. 

Firstly, I sleep so much and I get out of bed relaxed to take tiredness away. 
>> Firstly, I would sleep in and get out of bed feeling relaxed to shake off any tiredness. 

It should be a sunny day for picnic on the mat with some sandwiches and drinks. 
>> Ideally, it would be a sunny day perfect for a picnic on a mat with some sandwiches and drinks. 

I listen to music a kind of Jazz or pop which my favorite one. 
>> I would listen to my favorite music, like Jazz or pop, to enhance the experience. 

If I go to picnic with someone, I make agreeable conversation or I watch a movie together. 
>> If I went on the picnic with someone, we would have agreeable conversations or watch a movie together.

When it gets dark, I have a wonderful diner. The menu is steak with mash potato with elegant music ! 
>> As evening approaches, I would have a wonderful dinner, perhaps steak with mashed potatoes, accompanied by elegant music. 

After I finish my dinner, I head to mall for shopping like Jewelry, cosmetic and clothes because It makes me happy. 
>> After finishing dinner, I would head to the mall for some shopping, including jewelry, cosmetics, and clothes, because it brings me joy. 

Then, I go back home at 9 o\'clock.
>> Finally, I would return home around 9 o\'clock.

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