If you could edit your memories, which ones would you erase and why?

2022-03-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can edit my memories, I will erase bad memories like ghosts and monsters because of these memories, I can\'t fall asleep easily sometimes. These are the reasons why I sleep with my mom sometimes. I haven\'t met scary things in person, but I have bad memories. I don\'t know the reason why I have bad memories. Sleeping is very important for me. So, I need to edit my memories. I hope that I can remove my terrible memories.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kimberly!

There are usually reasons behind why certain things happen in our life. There is always a purpose for it. We just need to realize it. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can edit my memories, I will erase bad memories like ghosts and monsters because of these memories, I can\'t fall asleep easily sometimes.
>> If I can edit my memories, I will erase bad memories like ghosts and monsters because I couldn\'t sleep well when I was a kid because of those.

These are the reasons why I sleep with my mom sometimes.
>> CORRECT

I haven\'t met scary things in person, but I have bad memories.
>> I haven\'t seen scary things in person, but I have bad memories.

I don\'t know the reason why I have bad memories.
>> I don\'t know the reason why I have them.

Sleeping is very important for me.
>> Sleeping is very important for me so I need to remove these thoughts in my mind.

So, I need to edit my memories.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.

I hope that I can remove my terrible memories.
>> CORRECT

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