If you could get one gift for everyone in your family, regardless of the cost, what would you get th

2015-11-02 · 첨삭 강사 Carmen

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If I could get one gift for everyone in my family, I want harmonious family. It is difficult to make a harmonious family. I think it is in need of enough of money, health, effort, responsibility and so on. A harmonious family can’t buy with money, I have read news that some families who are one of the biggest global company in Korea a fighting for their properties. It can be explained that money does not relevant to happiness and harmony. One thing, we can not regardless of money or health. If we can’t earn enough money, it is possible to live separately. One member of family will go abroad to make money. Many children in Korea go abroad to study at a quite young age. They live with mother in foreign country, father provide economic support in Korea. They live separately from their family when they are too young. It is not a good phenomenon.

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Good evening, [이름]! Happy Monday! You did a great job once again for submitting your homework today! You have well constructed ideas and you just need to polish your grammar skills! I agree with your ideas and I think it is a good one! See you tomorrow!   Teacher Carmen ^^     If I could get one gift for everyone in my family, I want harmonious family. >> If I could get one gift for everyone in my family, I would just like to have a harmonious relationship within my family. It is difficult to make a harmonious family. >> It is difficult to have a harmonious relationship in the family. I think it is in need of enough of money, health, effort, responsibility and so on. >>I think it needs enough money, health, effort, responsibility and so on. A harmonious family can’t buy with money, I have read news that some families who are one of the biggest global company in Korea a fighting for their properties. >> You can\'t buy a harmonious relationship within the family. I have read in the news that some families who belong to one of the biggest global companies in Korea are fighting over their properties.   It can be explained that money does not relevant to happiness and harmony. >> It explains that money is not relevant to happiness and harmony. One thing, we can not regardless of money or health. >> Another thing is that happiness cannot be acheived regardless of the amount of money or health.   If we can’t earn enough money, it is possible to live separately. >> If we don\'t have enough money, it is possible that we will live our lives separately.   One member of family will go abroad to make money. >> For example, one member of the family needs to go abroad to earn money.   Many children in Korea go abroad to study at a quite young age. >> Correct!   They live with mother in foreign country, father provide economic support in Korea. >> They live with their mothers in a foreign country while their fathers stay in Korea to provide economic support. They live separately from their family when they are too young. >> They live separately from their families even though they are still too young.   It is not a good phenomenon. >> Correct!  

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