If you could get one gift for everyone in your family, regardless of the cost, what would you get th

2017-08-11 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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If you could get one gift for everyone in your family, regardless of the cost, what would you get them and why? I will get a car. Nowdays I am searching for suitable car. I have had a car for 5 years old. It is so cute but It is very compact. the car is weak for winter and summer. in winter, It is so cold. in summer, It is so hot. when we drive by that car, we swet so much. one summer day when we drove, we couldn't keep driving because of the hot weather. so we had to get off the car and we came into another hotel to shower our sweat body. we need a good car. today we will go to a market for buying a used car. we hope to buy a good and suitable car.

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Hello [이름]!!!

Nice job!!! I hope you can find a nice car.

Perseverance is what we need to achieve a goal in life. Studying could be very tough at times but through hard work you can see yourself speaking the language well.

T. Jeny

   


If you could get one gift for everyone in your family, regardless of the cost, what would you get them and why?
>>correct
I will get a car.

 >>correct

Nowdays I am searching for suitable car. 

>>Nowadays, I am looking for a suitable car. 
 I have had a car for 5 years old.

>>I have had a car for 5 years.

 It is so cute but It is very compact.

>>It is a cute compact car.

 the car is weak for winter and summer.

>>The car can\'t function well in winter and in summer.

In winter, It is so cold.

>>correct

In summer, It is so hot.

>>correct

when we drive by that car, we swet so much. one summer day when we drove, we couldn\'t keep driving because of the hot weather.

>>One summer day when we drove that car, we sweat a lot and we couldn\'t keep on driving because of the hot temperature.

so we had to get off the car and we came into another hotel to shower our sweat body.

>>So we had to get off and drop by a hotel to take a shower.

we need a good car.
>>correct
today we will go to a market for buying a used car.

>>Today, we will go to a shop to buy a second-hand car.

we hope to buy a good and suitable car.

>>correct


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