If you could give a pet in your life, who would it be ? what pet would it be ?

2024-06-17 · 첨삭 강사 Kristine

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If I could give someone a pet, I would give it to my youngest daughter first. My youngest daughter is an introvert, so she doesn\'t like going out and socializing with friends. So she spends most of her time with her elder sister and me, her dad. I would like to give her a pet dog as a friend who will play with her and comfort her when she is having a hard time. And I hope she becomes a bit more outgoing as she spends time with her dog. And I want to give myself a pet dog in the future. Later, when my two daughters get married and I live alone, I will be lonely. At that time, I would be happy to have an active dog with whom I can walk and exercise outdoors.

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Thank you for doing your homework. Please check the corrections and alternative sentences given. See you tomorrow!

- Kristine ^^ 

If I could give someone a pet, I would give it to my youngest daughter first.
>> If I could, my youngest daughter would be the first person I would gift a pet to.
My youngest daughter is an introvert, so she doesn\'t like going out and socializing with friends.
>> Correct. 
So she spends most of her time with her elder sister and me, her dad.
>> Correct. 
I would like to give her a pet dog as a friend who will play with her and comfort her when she is having a hard time.
>> I would like to give her a pet dog to make sure she has someone to play with and who will support her through difficult times.
And I hope she becomes a bit more outgoing as she spends time with her dog.
>> I hope that as she spends more time with her puppy as she becomes a little more sociable.
And I want to give myself a pet dog in the future.
>> I also want to give myself a pet dog in the future. 
Later, when my two daughters get married and I live alone, I will be lonely.
>> I\'ll be alone when my two girls get married and I\'ll be lonely. 
At that time, I would be happy to have an active dog with whom I can walk and exercise outdoors.
>> At that time, I would be happy to have an active dog with whom I could walk and exercise outdoors.

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