If you could go back to high school, would you change your major in college or university?

2021-12-15 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I won’t try shifting to a different major in university. However, I would broaden my perspective to deepen my knowledge of the global financial market. I focused my study in international finance as a finance and insurance major. Back at that time, I was busy catching up with the courses, so I did not have the chance to look for relevant studies to learn more about the global financial market. For example, I learned the importance of data analytics in finance since data matters most to financial institutions for cost and innovation purposes. Alongside this, accounting is a vital part of the financial services sector because it is the core of the business. After graduation, I realized the facts and tried to catch up with these trends by taking additional courses and getting certificates on accounting principles. Nevertheless, I felt that it would be helpful to educate myself gradually throughout my university days.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Aciel!

I won’t try shifting to a different major in university. 
>>>  correct
However, I would broaden my perspective to deepen my knowledge of the global financial market. 
>>>  correct 
I focused my study in international finance as a finance and insurance major. 
>>>OR: I focused my studies on international finance as a finance and insurance major.   
Back at that time, I was busy catching up with the courses, so I did not have the chance to look for relevant studies to learn more about the global financial market. 
>>>   correct  
For example, I learned the importance of data analytics in finance since data matters most to financial institutions for cost and innovation purposes. 
>>>  correct   
Alongside this, accounting is a vital part of the financial services sector because it is the core of the business. 
>>>    correct 
After graduation, I realized the facts and tried to catch up with these trends by taking additional courses and getting certificates on accounting principles. 
>>>    correct 
Nevertheless, I felt that it would be helpful to educate myself gradually throughout my university days.
>>>    correct 

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