If you could go for a drive for a few hours, where would you like to go and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I can drive for a Iong time, I want to go to the coastaI road with the sea. Because the scenery with sea would be so pretty. Also, I like the sea and water, so I think I can satisfy my taste.
There are a few citys I\'d Iike to visit, but I\'d Iike to go to Jeju first.
Jeju is famous for its coastaI roads and good pIaces to go for a drive. I want to go there as much as I\'m Iooking forward to how beautiful the scenery it has.
Second, I want to visit Gangneung, Sokcho, and Jumunjin.
There are aIso famous for seafood. Among seafood, I especiaIIy Iove crabs and shrimp, so there\'s no reason not to visit three places where I can taste fresh seafood and enjoy a nice coastaI drive.
Last, I\'d Iike to go to Yangyang.
It is a city close to Gangneung, Sokcho, and Jumunjin. This city is known as a good place to surfing. I want to enjoy a coastal road drive and surfing, which is a water activity.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
Thank you for your essay! You did a great job expressing your ideas clearly, and I can see that you’re putting real effort into organizing your thoughts in English.
I’ve corrected some sentences to make them more natural and fluent.
But also, I like the itinerary you mentioned. I was imagining it.
But also, I like the itinerary you mentioned. I was imagining it.
I hope that you could do it soon. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
If I can drive for a Iong time, I want to go to the coastaI road with the sea. Because the scenery with sea would be so pretty.
>> If I could drive for a long time, I’d want to go to a coastal road by the sea because the scenery would be so pretty.
Also, I like the sea and water, so I think I can satisfy my taste.
>> Also, I love the sea and water, so I think it would really suit my preferences.
There are a few citys I\'d Iike to visit, but I\'d Iike to go to Jeju first.
>> There are a few cities I’d like to visit, but I’d like to go to Jeju first.
Jeju is famous for its coastaI roads and good pIaces to go for a drive.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Jeju is known for its coastal roads and scenic driving routes.
I want to go there as much as I\'m Iooking forward to how beautiful the scenery it has.
>> I want to go there because I’m really looking forward to seeing how beautiful the scenery is.
Second, I want to visit Gangneung, Sokcho, and Jumunjin.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Next, I want to visit Gangneung, Sokcho, and Jumunjin.
There are aIso famous for seafood.
>> They are also famous for their seafood.
Among seafood, I especiaIIy Iove crabs and shrimp, so there\'s no reason not to visit three places where I can taste fresh seafood and enjoy a nice coastaI drive.
>> I especially love crabs and shrimp, so there’s no reason not to visit those three places where I can enjoy fresh seafood and a nice coastal drive.
Last, I\'d Iike to go to Yangyang.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Finally, Yangyang is another place I’d like to visit.
It is a city close to Gangneung, Sokcho, and Jumunjin.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It’s a city near Gangneung, Sokcho, and Jumunjin.
This city is known as a good place to surfing.
>> This city is known as a good place for surfing.
I want to enjoy a coastal road drive and surfing, which is a water activity.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I want to enjoy both a coastal drive and surfing.
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