If you could have one superpower, what would it be?

2018-07-09 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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If I could have one superpower, I want to get time control ability. I have two reasons that I want to get time control ability. First, if I have a time control ability, I will go to the future. then, I will see the dangerous or difficult situation to avoid those situation OR I will get lottery ticket to get much money. Secondly, if I have a time control ability, I will go the past time. then, I want to experience the history of the world like watching dinosaurs that we couldn't see in reality OR I will fix my mistakes that I made before. With writing this essay,I felt like getting this ability sincerely.

강사 첨삭

Hey, [이름]! ^_^
Thanks for writing this essay.
I enjoyed reading it.

I\'ve had some thoughts of my own while reading your essay.

Have you ever wondered why we were not given the gift to control time?

I\'ve thought about it in the past and after reading your essay, I realized why.

I sincerely believe that everything in life is a matter of perspective.

Maybe difficult situations and mistakes are blessings in disguise.

After all, we won\'t be who we are now if not for those mistakes and difficult situations.

You won\'t be the strong and determined person that you are now if it weren\'t for your mistakes.

Maybe dinosaurs became extinct because if they still existed, humanity will not have the chance to exist and flourish.

They say everything happens for a reason.

If we had the ability to control time, we rob ourselves the chance to experience things that we are experiencing now.

Anyway, this is just my point-of-view. ^^

I hope you\'re having a great day.

See you in class later. :)
~Teacher Charry

If I could have one superpower, I want to get time control ability.

>> If I could have one superpower, I want the ability to control time.
I have two reasons that I want to get time control ability.

>> I have two reasons why I want to get the ability to control time.

OR >> I have two reasons for wanting to control time.
First, if I have a time control ability, I will go to the future.

>> First, if I could control time, I will go to the future.

OR >> First, if I have the ability to control time, I will go to the future.
then, I will see the dangerous or difficult situation to avoid those situation OR I will get lottery ticket to get much money.

>> Then, I will look into the dangerous or difficult situations so I could avoid them or I will get the winning lottery ticket to get much money.
Secondly, if I have a time control ability, I will go the past time.

>> Secondly, if I have the ability to control time, I will go to the past.
then, I want to experience the history of the world like watching dinosaurs that we couldn\'t see in reality OR I will fix my mistakes that I made before. 

>> Then, I want to experience the history of the world like watching dinosaurs that we couldn\'t see now or I will fix the mistakes that I made before. 

OR >> Then, I want to experience the history of the world like watching dinosaurs that we don\'t have the luxury to see now or I will fix my mistakes. 
With writing this essay,I felt like getting this ability sincerely.

>> With writing this essay, I sincerely felt that I could get this ability. 

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