If you could have your own family one day, where is the best place to raise it?
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I think Sweden is the best place to raise my own family if I could have it one day.
First, we can enjoy the nature in Sweden. The airs are clean and many people in Sweden try to live environmentally friendly. There are lots of trees and beautiful scenes. I hope my children to learn how to love the nature.
Second, diverse people are embraced in Sweden generally. My children can learn being open-minded, not discriminating each other.
Third, it is easy to learn English in Sweden. Swedish people mostly speak English very well. The children can learn English naturally in Sweden.
Finally, most of all, spending time together with family is considered very important in Sweden. Swedish people usually don\'t work until late at night even if they are busy. I will be able to spend enough time with the family.
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Hi Cindy,
Thanks for finding time to do your homework despite your busy schedule:) What can I say, your homework is flawless! Great job!
-Rachel
I think Sweden is the best place to raise my own family if I could have it one day.
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First, we can enjoy the nature in Sweden. The airs are clean and many people in Sweden try to live environmentally friendly. There are lots of trees and beautiful scenes. I hope my children to learn how to love the nature.
First, we can enjoy the nature in Sweden. The airs are clean and many people in Sweden try to live environmentally friendly. There are lots of trees and beautiful scenes. I hope my children to learn how to love the nature.
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Second, diverse people are embraced in Sweden generally. My children can learn being open-minded, not discriminating each other.
Second, diverse people are embraced in Sweden generally. My children can learn being open-minded, not discriminating each other.
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Third, it is easy to learn English in Sweden. Swedish people mostly speak English very well. The children can learn English naturally in Sweden.
Third, it is easy to learn English in Sweden. Swedish people mostly speak English very well. The children can learn English naturally in Sweden.
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Finally, most of all, spending time together with family is considered very important in Sweden. Swedish people usually don\'t work until late at night even if they are busy. I will be able to spend enough time with the family.
Finally, most of all, spending time together with family is considered very important in Sweden. Swedish people usually don\'t work until late at night even if they are busy. I will be able to spend enough time with the family.
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