If you could plan your perfect weekend, what would you do?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I could plan my perfect weekend, I would stay in my grandparent’s house.
My grandparent’s house is far from my house. It takes 6 hours for a car. That’s why I can’t go there frequently.
I want to go there for some reasons.
First, I love my grandparents.
They are so kind and love me a lot. My grandmother is good at cooking, so I can eat delicious food.
Also, my grandfather is good at driving. We can drive to nice places by his car.
Second, I like the countryside’s atmosphere.
I live in the capital city of Korea. I sometimes feel tired because everywhere is crowded with people here.
But my grandparent’s house is located in a countryside. I can become easygoing because there is quiet and calm.
For these reasons, If I spend my weekend with my grandparents in their house, I will have a perfect weekend.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Great job! I really enjoyed reading about your perfect weekend. I like how you described your grandparents and the peaceful countryside. It makes your essay feel very personal and warm. Your ideas are clear and well-organized. Keep up the good work!
~Teacher Polly
If I could plan my perfect weekend, I would stay in my grandparent’s house.
>>If I could plan my perfect weekend, I would stay at my grandparents’ house.
My grandparent’s house is far from my house.
>>Their house is far from mine.
It takes 6 hours for a car. That’s why I can’t go there frequently.
>> It takes about six hours by car, so I can’t go there often.
I want to go there for some reasons.
>>I want to go there for several reasons.
First, I love my grandparents.
>>CORRECT
They are so kind and love me a lot.
>>CORRECT
My grandmother is good at cooking, so I can eat delicious food.
>>CORRECT
OR>>My grandmother is a great cook, so I can enjoy delicious food.
Also, my grandfather is good at driving.
>>CORRECT
We can drive to nice places by his car.
>>We can go to nice places together in his car.
Second, I like the countryside’s atmosphere.
>>CORRECT
I live in the capital city of Korea.
>>CORRECT
I sometimes feel tired because everywhere is crowded with people here.
>> Sometimes I feel tired because the city is crowded with people.
But my grandparent’s house is located in a countryside.
>>But my grandparents’ house is in the countryside.
I can become easygoing because there is quiet and calm.
>>Being there helps me feel relaxed and easygoing because it\'s quiet and calm.
For these reasons, If I spend my weekend with my grandparents in their house, I will have a perfect weekend.
>>For these reasons, spending my weekend with my grandparents would be the perfect weekend for me.
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