If you could stop a bad habit that you have, what would you stop?
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Hi Sir [이름]!
I appreciate that you shared these things with me,
I am sure that you will be able to stop those habits.
It is important that we are aware of the things that we need to change to be a better person.
I don\'t think there is a perfect person.
All of us have bad habits. We do have a chance to turn it into good.
I am so grateful that I was able to know you better. Thanks for trusting me.
Talk to you later.
Teacher Nina
There are three bad habits that I would like to stop or quit.
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The first thing is that I am a short tempered person.
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>> First, I am an irascible person
I easily get upset and my face turns red when facing the situation where I am offenced by someone or something.
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I can hardly calm down and I vent out my emotion immediately without holding off.
>> Did you mean: I hardly calm down and I vent out my emotion immediately without holding off.
>> OR: It is difficult for me to calm down and I vent out my emotion immediately without being careful with my words/ actions.
Especially when I play a game, I tend to be too much absorbed in the winning of it.
>> Especially when I play a game, I tend to be too much absorbed in winning it.
So, if the game is progressing not in favor of me, I often blame my partner.
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After the game or come home, I regret what I did to my team mate.
>> After the game or when I arrive home, I regret what I did to my teammate.
Secondly, I do not laugh a lot.
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I am not humorous, either.
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I look serious all the time.
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It makes people around me feel not easy to talk to me.
>> It makes people around me to feel that it is not easy to talk to me,
>> It makes people around me think feel that I am not approachable.
Even my family said that I am stone faced.
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>> My family even said that I am a stone faced person.
I should practice to make a smile.
>> I should practice to smile.
People like a person who is bright, cheerful, funny, and positive.
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If you look serious and arrogant, people will leave you gradually.
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The third thing is that I am a bit timid.
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I often have a hard time to get rid of stress.
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