If you could stop a bad habit that you have, what would you stop?

2015-01-14 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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There are three bad habits that I would like to stop or quit. The first thing is that I am a short tempered person. I easily get upset and my face turns red when facing the situation where I am offenced by someone or something. I can hardly calm down and I vent out my emotion immediately without holding off. Especially when I play a game, I tend to be too much absorbed in the winning of it. So, if the game is progressing not in favor of me, I often blame my partner. After the game or come home, I regret what I did to my team mate. Secondly, I do not laugh a lot. I am not humorous, either. I look serious all the time. It makes people around me feel not easy to talk to me. Even my family said that I am stone faced. I should practice to make a smile. People like a person who is bright, cheerful, funny, and positive. If you look serious and arrogant, people will leave you gradually. The third thing is that I am a bit timid. I often have a hard time to get rid of stress.

강사 첨삭

Hi Sir [이름]!

I appreciate that you shared these things with me,

I am sure that you will be able to stop those habits.

It is important that we are aware of the things that we need to change to be a better person.

I don\'t think there is a perfect person.

All of us have bad habits. We do have a chance to turn it into good.

I am so grateful that I was able to know you better. Thanks for trusting me.

Talk to you later.
Teacher Nina


There are three bad habits that I would like to stop or quit.

>> correct

The first thing is that I am a short tempered person.

>> correct

>> First, I am an irascible person

I easily get upset and my face turns red when facing the situation where I am offenced by someone or something.

>> correct

I can hardly calm down and I vent out my emotion immediately without holding off.

>> Did you mean: I hardly calm down and I vent out my emotion immediately without holding off.

>> OR: It is difficult for me to calm down and I vent out my emotion immediately without being careful with my words/ actions.

Especially when I play a game, I tend to be too much absorbed in the winning of it.

>> Especially when I play a game, I tend to be too much absorbed in winning it.

So, if the game is progressing not in favor of me, I often blame my partner.

>> correct

After the game or come home, I regret what I did to my team mate.

>> After the game or when I arrive home, I regret what I did to my teammate.

Secondly, I do not laugh a lot.

>> correct

I am not humorous, either.

>> correct

I look serious all the time.

>> correct

It makes people around me feel not easy to talk to me.

>> It makes people around me to feel that it is not easy to talk to me,
>> It makes people around me think feel that I am not approachable.

Even my family said that I am stone faced.

>> correct
>> My family even said that I am a stone faced person.

I should practice to make a smile.

>> I should practice to smile.

People like a person who is bright, cheerful, funny, and positive.

>> correct

If you look serious and arrogant, people will leave you gradually.

>> correct

The third thing is that I am a bit timid.

>> correct

I often have a hard time to get rid of stress.

>> correct

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