If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose

2015-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I majored in Electrical and Electronics Engineering. As I studied engineering, I wanted to broaden my academic experience to other areas such as art and literature. There is a perception toward engineers like they are stubborn, one-way minded, lack social skills, not knowledgeable about art or music. I wanted myself to be not categorized as such. So, I have actually taken art class, read many books, and listened to music in the music hall that has been operated by a music club in college. Although all my efforts have not brought in any tangible outcomes, I think that it was at least worth endeavoring. Now when I recall my school years and based on my work experience, I somewhat regret that I should have studied finance and marketing. These two subjects are most commonly required skills at work. Almost all of the private corporations sell goods or service and pursue a profit. In order to sell and make a profit, the two most important things we should know are marketing and finance.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Sir [이름]!

Wow! You accomplished a lot of things. ^^

Thanks for sharing about your feelings and insights about the topic.

Oh my god! I am not good at Math.

I think I can\'t run my own business because I\'m not good at marketing and finance. ^.^ Hihihi.

Anyway, I hope that you will continue exploring things. See you in class.
Teacher Nina


I majored in Electrical and Electronics Engineering.

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As I studied engineering, I wanted to broaden my academic experience to other areas such as art and literature.

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There is a perception toward engineers like they are stubborn, one-way minded, lack social skills, not knowledgeable about art or music.

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>> OR: There is a perception toward Engineers such as they are stubborn, one-way minded, lack social skills, not knowledgeable about art or music.

I wanted myself to be not categorized as such.

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So, I have actually taken art class, read many books, and listened to music in the music hall that has been operated by a music club in college.

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Although all my efforts have not brought in any tangible outcomes, I think that it was at least worth endeavoring.

>> correct

Now when I recall my school years and based on my work experience, I somewhat regret that I should have studied finance and marketing. 

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These two subjects are most commonly required skills at work.

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Almost all of the private corporations sell goods or service and pursue a profit.

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In order to sell and make a profit, the two most important things we should know are marketing and finance.

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>> OR: In order to sell and make a profit, the two most important things are we should know something about marketing and finance.

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