If you could travel back in time, where would you go?
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If I can travel back in time, I wanna go to the lands which are really expensive now.
Before, the price was lower than now so I can buy many things cheaper in the past.
I can buy something that I wanted cheaper than now, and the lands too.
So if I buy some lands near by the cities or the lands which are expensive now, I can have a lot of profits.
And also real estate is one of the most easy ways to earn mush money, so it will be great.
Of course I will use those money for me, but also I will use them for other people.
And if I get a chance, I wanna found my own company.
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Hi [이름]:)
Smart choice! You can get ahead with that idea.
If I can travel back in time, I wanna go to the lands which are really expensive now.
>> CORRECT
Before, the price was lower than now so I can buy many things cheaper in the past.
>> Before, the prices were lower than now so I can buy many things cheaper in the past.
I can buy something that I wanted cheaper than now, and the lands too.
>> I can buy things and lands at a cheaper price.
So if I buy some lands near by the cities or the lands which are expensive now, I can have a lot of profits.
>> So if I buy some lands near by the cities or lands that are expensive now, I can have a lot of profit.
And also real estate is one of the most easy ways to earn mush money, so it will be great.
>> Also, real estate is one of the most easiest way to earn money so it will be great.
Of course I will use those money for me, but also I will use them for other people.
>> Of course I will use those money for myself, but I will also use it for other people.
And if I get a chance, I wanna found my own company.
>> And if I get a chance, I want to build my own company.
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