If you could volunteer to help after a natural disaster, what could you do?

2017-03-20 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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If I could volunteer to help after a natural disaster, I would cook for the people who recieved damage. There are two reasons why. The first reason that food is one of most important source of our energy. Therefor, it is really important in our life. The second reason is that it helps our body temperature keep stable. If they can't eat some food, their body temperature will drop, and they can be dead. As a result, I think I should cook some food for the people for these reasons.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Thank you for sending this in. Keep up the good job! Have a great day!

~Kelly^^

If I could volunteer to help after a natural disaster, I would cook for the people who recieved damage.

>> If I could volunteer to help after a natural disaster, I would cook for the people who were victims of a natural disaster.

There are two reasons why.

>> Correct.
The first reason that food is one of most important source of our energy.

>> The first reason is that, food is one of the most important sources of our energy.

Therefor, it is really important in our life.

>> Correct.

***therefore
The second reason is that it helps our body temperature keep stable.

>> The second reason is that it helps in keeping our body temperature stable.

>> OR: In addition, it helps in maintaining our body temperature.

If they can\'t eat some food, their body temperature will drop, and they can be dead.

>> If they can\'t eat some food, their body temperature will drop, and they can die.
As a result, I think I should cook some food for the people for these reasons.

>> Correct.

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