If you could volunteer to help after a natural disaster, what could you do?
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Thank you for sending this in. Keep up the good job! Have a great day!
~Kelly^^
If I could volunteer to help after a natural disaster, I would cook for the people who recieved damage.
>> If I could volunteer to help after a natural disaster, I would cook for the people who were victims of a natural disaster.
There are two reasons why.
>> Correct.
The first reason that food is one of most important source of our energy.
>> The first reason is that, food is one of the most important sources of our energy.
Therefor, it is really important in our life.
>> Correct.
***therefore
The second reason is that it helps our body temperature keep stable.
>> The second reason is that it helps in keeping our body temperature stable.
>> OR: In addition, it helps in maintaining our body temperature.
If they can\'t eat some food, their body temperature will drop, and they can be dead.
>> If they can\'t eat some food, their body temperature will drop, and they can die.
As a result, I think I should cook some food for the people for these reasons.
>> Correct.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.