If you could work in another country, where would it be and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I could work in another country, I would choose Japan.
I think living abroad is different from travelling abroad.
I should know their language and culture to live aborad.
Fortunately, I could understand them because I lived in Japan for 6 months, thanks to my major.
Also, I have worked at company from Japan before.
I know how to treat seniors and clients.
They are organized and detail-oriented, so when we report something, we should organize it in detail.
Also, it takes more time to get along with coworkers personally, being too pushy them isn\'t encouraged.
Consequently, I would choose Japan because I understand its culture better than that of other countries.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
You expressed your ideas very clearly and gave strong reasons for choosing Japan! I like how you connected your personal experience to your choice. It makes your writing more convincing and natural. Just be careful with small grammar mistakes like “aborad” → “abroad” and “at company” → “for a company.” Overall, this is a well-organized and thoughtful paragraph. Great job!
~Teacher Polly
>>CORRECT
I think living abroad is different from travelling abroad.
I should know their language and culture to live aborad.
>>I think living abroad is different from traveling abroad because I would need to understand the language and culture to live there.
Fortunately, I could understand them because I lived in Japan for 6 months, thanks to my major.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Fortunately, I already have some understanding of them because I lived in Japan for six months, thanks to my major.
Also, I have worked at company from Japan before.
I know how to treat seniors and clients.
>>I also worked for a Japanese company before, so I learned how to treat seniors and clients properly.
They are organized and detail-oriented, so when we report something, we should organize it in detail.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Japanese people are organized and detail-oriented, so when we report something, it should be well-structured.
Also, it takes more time to get along with coworkers personally, being too pushy them isn\'t encouraged.
>>It also takes time to build personal relationships with coworkers, and being too pushy is not encouraged.
Consequently, I would choose Japan because I understand its culture better than that of other countries.
>>CORRECT
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