If you could write one new law that everyone had to obey, what law would you create?

2020-01-06 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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The court sentenced the accident which occurred few months ago. The motorcycle driver drove over the speed limit while the victims in the car tried to change lane. However, the motorcycle didn\'t want to lower its speed so he just crashed to the car that changed its lane and then turned 360 degrees in the air caused his death. It is really sad news because of motorcycle. Motorcycle drivers in Korea look like terrorists on the road because they usually break the laws on the road. Most of them tend to violate a traffic light. I always think that I want to ban motorcycle to drive road and apartments. So, If I can create the law, I would prohibit motorcycle to on the road because of its risks.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Mr. [이름]! Thanks for this. Your answer is quite practical and sensible. I\'m glad you\'re thinking about the betterment of society.

Have a great Monday! I\'ll see you soon. ^_^

~T.Avery

The court sentenced the accident which occurred few months ago.

>> CORRECT

The motorcycle driver drove over the speed limit while the victims in the car tried to change lane.

>> CORRECT

However, the motorcycle didn\'t want to lower its speed so he just crashed to the car that changed its lane and then turned 360 degrees in the air caused his death.

>> However, the motorcycle didn\'t want to lower its speed so he just crashed to the car that changed its lane and then turned 360 degrees in the air which caused his death.

It is really sad news because of motorcycle.

>> It was a really sad news because of the motorcycle incident.

Motorcycle drivers in Korea look like terrorists on the road because they usually break the laws on the road.

>> CORRECT

OR>> Motorcycle drivers in Korea look like terrorists on the road because they usually violate traffic rules.

Most of them tend to violate a traffic light.

>> Most of them tend to ignore the traffic lights.

I always think that I want to ban motorcycle to drive road and apartments.

>> I always thought that I wanted to ban motorcycles from driving on the road and near apartment buildings.

So, If I can create the law, I would prohibit motorcycle to on the road because of its risks.

>> Therefore, if I can create a law, I would prohibit motorcycles on the road because of their risks.

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