if you don't mind, I want you to corret my writing that I already wrote.

Dear [Name],

A terrific Tuesday to you! ^.^

To start, I would like to say thank you.

Thank you for making your composition and sharing your ideas with me through writing.

By the way, I like your writing.

Anyway, don\'t forget to read the corrections and suggestion below.

Happy reading! ^^

See you soon! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

You have ordered an item from a company, but you have received a wrong item.

>> CORRECT!

So write a person who is in charge about the wrong item, describing the purpose of the letter and what you want from the company.
>> So, write to a person who is in charge of the wrong item, describe the purpose of the letter and what you want from the company.
I am writing to you to ask about the wrong item that you sent me a few days ago.

>> CORRECT!

I ordered a navy dress for my sister.

>> CORRECT!

But I got a black dress.

>> But, I got a black dress.

>> OR: However, I got a black dress.

So I was very disappointed about it .

>> So, I was very disappointed about it.

>> OR: Therefore, I was very disappointed about it.

After I got the wrong item, immediately I called your company.

>> After I got the wrong item, I immediately called your company.

Someone who is in charge of it told me that she will send a right cloth three days later.

>> Someone who is in charge of it told me that she will send the right clothes three days later.

>> OR: Someone who is in charge of it told me that she will send the right order three days later.

But there is a big problem that my sister\'s birthday is two days later.

>> But, there is a big problem. My sister\'s birthday is two days later.

>> OR: However, there is a big problem. My sister\'s birthday is two days later.

So I want you to send me a navy dress right now using express mail.

>> So, I want you to send me a navy dress right now using an express mail.

>> OR: So, I want you to send me the navy dress that I ordered using an express mail today.

and I think you must pay the fee of express mail.

>> And, I think you must pay the fee for the shipping.

>> In addition, I think you must pay the fee for the shipping.

Actually, I have used your company products and been satisfied.

>> Actually, I have used your products and been satisfied.

>> OR: Actually, I have used your products and been satisfied with your service.

>> OR: Actually, I am one of your patrons and has been satisfied with your service.

But it is first time this happened.

>> But, it is the first time this happened.

>> OR: However, it is the first time this happened.
Would it be possible if you could send me the navy dress using express mail? .

>> Would it be possible if you could send me the navy dress using express mail?

It is a clearly your fault.

>> It is clearly your fault.

So I think that you are responsible for the expense incurred.

>> So, I think that you are responsible for the expense incurred.

>> OR: Therefore, I think that you are responsible for the expense incurred.