If you get a chance to try an activity abroad, what will it be and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I have a chance to try an activity, abroad, I want to do activities that other people will feel scary.
I like to do active and dynamic activities. Among them, I want to do activities that I have never done before, such as snorkeling, paragliding, and bungee jumping.
If there is an ocean and there is very clean, I want to see inside the see while snorkeling. If there is a place where I can go paragliding, I want to go paragliding. If there is a place where I can go bungee jumping, I want to go bungee jumping.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
Thank you for submitting your answer. Great job on making your essay. ^^
I just did some minor corrections.
I hope that in the future, you will be able to do those activities. They sound so fun! ^^
~ Teacher Gina
If I have a chance to try an activity, abroad, I want to do activities that other people will feel scary.
>> If I have a chance to try an activity abroad, I want to do activities that other people will feel scared.
I like to do active and dynamic activities.
>> CORRECT.
Among them, I want to do activities that I have never done before, such as snorkeling, paragliding, and bungee jumping.
>> CORRECT.
If there is an ocean and there is very clean, I want to see inside the see while snorkeling.
>> If there is an ocean and it is very clean, I want to see what\'s in there while snorkeling.
If there is a place where I can go paragliding, I want to go paragliding.
>> CORRECT.
If there is a place where I can go bungee jumping, I want to go bungee jumping.
>> CORRECT.
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