If you had a lot of money, what is the first thing you\'ll buy and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I had a lot of money, I will give someone it instead of buying something because I think that I have to return their favor. Thanks to them, I could live a better life. If they didn\'t help me, I wouldn\'t be able to live a life happily. They helped me, so, this is my turn. I have to express that I\'m thankful to them. This is a chance and my dream! But this sentences are not reality. I know that making dreams come true is not easy, but I hope that it can be come true.
강사 첨삭
Hi Kimberly:)
I hope that those dreams will come true for you. You are a very thoughtful person. :) You always think of others first before yourself,
If I had a lot of money, I will give someone it instead of buying something because I think that I have to return their favor.
>> If I had a lot of money, I will give it to someone instead of buying something because I think that I have to return their favor.
Thanks to them, I could live a better life.
>> CORRECT
If they didn\'t help me, I wouldn\'t be able to live a life happily.
>> CORRECT
They helped me, so, this is my turn.
>> They helped me, so this is my way of giving back.
I have to express that I\'m thankful to them.
>> I have to express that I\'m thankful for them.
This is a chance and my dream! But this sentences are not reality.
>> This is one of my dreams but it hasn\'t come true yet.
I know that making dreams come true is not easy, but I hope that it can be come true.
>> I know that making dreams come true is not easy, but I hope that it will be someday.
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