If you had a lot of money, what is the first thing you\'ll buy and why?

2022-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I have a lot of money, then I will invest so that I could make more money. If I invest to some companies, or if I buy some lands, then I can make more money. If I just use the money for buying something, then I can\'t make more money. But if I invest or buy some lands, then I can make more money with the money. And then I would be able to get a lot of things that I wanted to buy. That\'s why I wanted to invest if I get a lot of money.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]:)

Investing your money is actually a good idea so that you won\'t run out of it in the future. :) 

PS: Avoid redundancy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I have a lot of money, then I will invest so that I could make more money.
>> If I have a lot of money, I will invest it so that I can make more money. 

If I invest to some companies, or if I buy some lands, then I can make more money.
>> If I invest in some companies or  buy some lands, I can make more money.

If I just use the money for buying something, then I can\'t make more money.
>> If I just spend it by buying random thing, I won\'t earn more money. 

But if I invest or buy some lands, then I can make more money with the money.
>> But if I invest it, I can make more money with it. 

And then I would be able to get a lot of things that I wanted to buy.
>> Then, I will be able to buy a lot of things that I want to buy. 

That\'s why I wanted to invest if I get a lot of money.
>> That\'s why I want to invest my money. 

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