If you had a lot of money, what is the first thing you\'ll buy and why?
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If I have a lot of money, then I will invest so that I could make more money.
If I invest to some companies, or if I buy some lands, then I can make more money.
If I just use the money for buying something, then I can\'t make more money.
But if I invest or buy some lands, then I can make more money with the money.
And then I would be able to get a lot of things that I wanted to buy.
That\'s why I wanted to invest if I get a lot of money.
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Hi [이름]:)
Investing your money is actually a good idea so that you won\'t run out of it in the future. :)
PS: Avoid redundancy.
If I have a lot of money, then I will invest so that I could make more money.
>> If I have a lot of money, I will invest it so that I can make more money.
If I invest to some companies, or if I buy some lands, then I can make more money.
>> If I invest in some companies or buy some lands, I can make more money.
If I just use the money for buying something, then I can\'t make more money.
>> If I just spend it by buying random thing, I won\'t earn more money.
But if I invest or buy some lands, then I can make more money with the money.
>> But if I invest it, I can make more money with it.
And then I would be able to get a lot of things that I wanted to buy.
>> Then, I will be able to buy a lot of things that I want to buy.
That\'s why I wanted to invest if I get a lot of money.
>> That\'s why I want to invest my money.
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