If you had only 24 hours to live, what would you do?
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Good morning Jason^^
There are a lot of dishes in the world, why did you choose ice cream cake?
Ha! Ha! That sounds cool, though^^
Take note of your active versus passive voice~
See you later
First, I will write a lot of letters to the people who I have met during my life since I would wanted to mark that I have been lived in this world.
>>First, I will write a lot of letters to the people who I have met during my life since I would wanted to mark that I have lived in this world.
And then I will send letters with enclosed lotto as a present to the people.
>>And then I will send letters with an enclosed lotto ticket as a present to the people.
Second, I will do everything except kill the others because of that I have been wondered about the feeling of the things opposite my belief furthermore dangerous things.
>> Second, I will do everything except kill the others which is the reason why I wondered about the feelings of others opposite my belief, not to mention, dangerous things.
For example, drug, smoking a cigar, riding a motor cycle very fast on the road, spraying money at the highest floor, and prostitution.
>>For example, doing drugs, smoking a cigar, riding a motorcycle very fast on the road, scattering money at the highest floor, and prostitution.
However, I think I might not do all of thinks that I wrote since I would not have enough time to do.
>> However, I think I might not do all of the things that I wrote since I would not have enough time to do.
Thus, I will spend my last day as below.
>>CORRECT!
I will just withdrawal all of my money in the bank, and then put money in my house giving it to my parents and younger brother.
>> I will just withdraw all of my money in the bank, and then put the money in my house and give it to my parents and younger brother.
And I will buy ice-cream cake to celebrate my last day in the world.
>>CORRECT!
I think the others don’t need to be sad since I will go back to the area that I have been come from.
>> I think the others don’t need to be sad since I will go back to the area that I came from.
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