If you had the power to make a new law, what law would you enact?

2015-06-05 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Actually there are too many laws that have been already introduced and being enforced. I am standing on the side of advocating the concept of individual rights and freedoms. The less the government is involved in citizens’ lives is the better. The government’s role should be limited to serve the public interest. It should provide safe places and protect its people. These days, due to the complexity of the society, different needs from people, and dynamics of international situations, governments are getting bigger and control more over their people’s day to day affairs. Laws should be minimum devices that can make people’s rights to freedom not infringed. Being free is simply part of life. Governmental restrictions should be kept to a minimum, although some of the involvement might be considered helpful. The flip side of the coin is that individuals should take a responsibility for the outcome of the decisions they make. Deregulation is the direction we have to pursue.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]!!

A great Friday!!

I hope that you had an easy day.

I am sure that you are really looking forward for the weekend, in order for you to take a rest.

In every country, there are some flaws with the government.

We just have to know when to fight for our right.

Thank you for sharing your opinions about this matter.

Talk to you in class.
Teacher Nina


Actually there are too many laws that have been already introduced and being enforced.

>> correct

I am standing on the side of advocating the concept of individual rights and freedoms.

>> correct

The less the government is involved in citizens’ lives is the better.

>> The less the government is involved in citizens’ lives is better.

The government’s role should be limited to serve the public interest.

>> correct

It should provide safe places and protect its people.

>> correct

These days, due to the complexity of the society, different needs from people, and dynamics of international situations, governments are getting bigger and control more over their people’s day to day affairs.

>> correct

>> Better: These days, due to the complexity of the society, different needs from people, dynamics of international situations, governments are getting bigger and control more their people’s daily affairs.

Laws should be minimum devices that can make people’s rights to freedom not infringed.

>> Did you mean: Laws should be minimum that can make people\'s rights to freedom not infringed.

Being free is simply part of life.

>> correct

Governmental restrictions should be kept to a minimum, although some of the involvement might be considered helpful.

>> correct

The flip side of the coin is that individuals should take a responsibility for the outcome of the decisions they make.

>> The flip side of the coin is that individuals should take responsibility for the outcome of the decisions they make.

>> OR: The flip side of the coin is that individuals should be responsible for the outcome of the decisions they make.

Deregulation is the direction we have to pursue.

>> correct

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