If you had the power to stop and restart time, when would you use it?

2014-07-02 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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If I had the power to stop and restart time, I would use it when I take an exam. I always felt that I needed more time before taking an exam. In most cases, I’ve been pressed for time when taking an exam. I thought that I could be completely ready for an exam and do better if I had some more time like an hour or a day especially when I crammed. When I have an important meeting and I’m late, I’m desperate for more time. Think about the situation where you are late for a job interview. Time is ticking and the cars on the road do not move while you are behind the wheel. When I fight the clock, time passes much faster than usual. Above all, when I look at my parents who are getting weak and old such as increasing wrinkles, losing teeth, being bent, losing hearing, and so on, I feel sad and I wish I could have the power to manage time so that I can push the button to stop time. Even I sometimes want to have a stronger power to turn back time, so I want bring them their youth.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sir [이름]!
A wonderful day to you.

Oh my god! You are really a sweet and kind person.

I felt your love for your parents.

If only we could bring back the time, we would.

I\'m really scared that my parents are getting old.

Let us show our love to them always. Talk to you soon.

Thanks for inspiring me again. Have a nice day.

Teacher Nina

 

If I had the power to stop and restart time, I would use it when I take an exam.

>> If I have the power to stop and restart time, I would use it when I take an exam.

>> OR: If I will have the power  to stop and restart the time, I would use it when I will take an exam.

I always felt that I needed more time before taking an exam.

>> Correct

>> OR: I always felt that I needed more time before the exam.

In most cases, I’ve been pressed for time when taking an exam.

>> Correct

>> OR: In most cases, I\'ve been pressured because of the time,

I thought that I could be completely ready for an exam and do better if I had some more time like an hour or a day especially when I crammed.

>> I thought that I could be completely ready for an exam and do better if I had more time, like an hour or a day especially when I crammed.  

When I have an important meeting and I’m late, I’m desperate for more time.

>> Correct

>> OR: When I have an important meeting and I\'m late. I\'m desperate to have more time.

Think about the situation where you are late for a job interview.

>> Correct

Time is ticking and the cars on the road do not move while you are behind the wheel.

>> Correct

When I fight the clock, time passes much faster than usual.

>> Correct

Above all, when I look at my parents who are getting weak and old such as increasing wrinkles, losing teeth, being bent, losing hearing, and so on, I feel sad and I wish I could have the power to manage time so that I can push the button to stop time.

>> Correct

>> OR: Above all, when I look at my parents who are getting weak and old such as increasing wrinkles, losing teeth, being bent, losing their sense of hearing, and so on, I feel sad. And I wish I could have the power to manage time so that I can push the button to stop time.

Even I sometimes want to have a stronger power to turn back time, so I want bring them their youth.

>> I even sometimes want to have a stronger power to turn back time, so I can bring them back to their youth.

>> OR: I even sometimes want to have a stronger to turn back the time, so I can bring them back to their younger years.

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