If you had to choose between a strict vegetarian diet forever or a junk food diet forever, which wou

2015-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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If I had to choose between a strict vegetarian diet forever or a junk food diet forever, I would choose the former because eating a junk food forever could give a critical impact to my body.I would become fat and suffer from a lot of diseases.I won’t be able to live long due to the health problem.Eating junk foods is an unavoidable temptation, although I try hard not to do it. It is so tasty and delicious that once we are used to, it is really hard to stop eating them. Schools in some states in the US are banned to offer students with soda like cola or sweet milk for lunch for the sake of Children’s health.It was a stern and aggressive measure to protect young children from such not nutritious diet.We are well aware of the impact of eating unhealthy food, however, we as a weak human being do not have strong will to put ourselves under control.The strict vegetarian diet might be as difficult as a junk food diet because when we have social gatherings, we sometimes do not have choice.

강사 첨삭

Hi Sir [이름]!

I want to confess something. Hihihi.

I am fond of eating junk food. I can\'t control myself from eating it.

Especially when I am stressed. I agree with you.

We should explain to children the bad effects of it.

I am sure that they will understand it.

Teacher Nina


If I had to choose between a strict vegetarian diet forever or a junk food diet forever, I would choose the former because eating a junk food forever could give a critical impact to my body.

>> correct

I would become fat and suffer from a lot of diseases.

>> correct

>> I would become fat and suffer from various illnesses.

I won’t be able to live long due to the health problem.

>> correct

>> I won\'t be able to have a long life due to health problems.

Eating junk foods is an unavoidable temptation, although I try hard not to do it.

>> correct

It is so tasty and delicious that once we are used to, it is really hard to stop eating them.

>> correct

Schools in some states in the US are banned to offer students with soda like cola or sweet milk for lunch for the sake of Children’s health.

>> correct

>> Schools in some states in the US are banned to offer students with soda like cola or sweet milk for lunch for the sake of the children’s health.

It was a stern and aggressive measure to protect young children from such not nutritious diet.

>> correct

We are well aware of the impact of eating unhealthy food, however, we as a weak human being do not have strong will to put ourselves under control.

>> correct

>> We are well aware of the impact of eating unhealthy food. However, we as a weak human being do not have strong will to control.

The strict vegetarian diet might be as difficult as a junk food diet because when we have social gatherings, we sometimes do not have choice.

>> correct

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