If you had to eliminate a sport or several sports from the Olympics, which would you choose? Support

2017-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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If I had to eliminate a sport or several sports from the Olympics, I would remove curling. There are two reasons to support my answer. The first reason is that I think it is not kind of hard sports. Personally, sports should make our body tire, but it doesn't like that. Another reason is that I'm not interested in the event. I'm an active person, so I enjoy watching track and field or swim. However, whenever I watched this one, it makes me bore. As a result, I think curling need to be eliminated for these reaosns.

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Hi [이름]!

Thank for being participative in answering all your homework. It\'s a good way to prepare for your exam. Keep up the good work!^^

~Kelly^^ 

If I had to eliminate a sport or several sports from the Olympics, I would remove curling.

>> If I had to eliminate a sport from the Olympics, I would remove curling.

There are two reasons to support my answer. 

>> Correct.
The first reason is that I think it is not kind of hard sports.

>> The first reason is that I think it is not a kind of hard sport.

Personally, sports should make our body tire, but it doesn\'t like that.

>> Personally, I think that sports should make our body tired, but it doesn\'t apply that way.
Another reason is that I\'m not interested in the event.

>> Correct.

I\'m an active person, so I enjoy watching track and field or swim.

>> I\'m an active person, so I enjoy watching track and field or swimming.

However, whenever I watched this one, it makes me bore.

>> However, whenever I watch this one, it makes me feel bored.
As a result, I think curling need to be eliminated for these reaosns.

>> As a result, I think curling needs to be eliminated for these reasons.

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