If you had your own business, what kind of business would it be and how would you run it?

2015-12-24 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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If I had my own business, I would run a lease business. First of all, It will give another chance to me to enjoy my life. It is because I'm interested in real estates and I can do well in this kind of business. I had studied about the law of real eatates. It was very interesting to know about that. Also, I can work until old ages and I can have more free time comparing to other jobs. In addition, I want to work continuously. It's really hard to work in companies until retirement age these days. Most companies have difficulty in their business nowadays, so they want to reduce the expenses like wages. That's why they don't hire new employees and fire many workers. The economy condition in Korea is getting worse, so it's really hard to work in same place until retirement age. I have to prepare my retirement from the present company, so I have thought about my own business. If I have my own business, I would do my best becuase the more I work hard, the more I can get a profit.

강사 첨삭

Advance merry Christmas Ms. [이름]!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. And it is very well said. Life after work is sometimes uncertain to some because of course, they do not have any work where they can get their income for their daily lives. But the business you are thinking of would be a very certain plan when you reach the retirement age. Hope that it will happen. Anyway, have a merry Christmas and enjoy it with your family.
See you next week!


Always,

Kathrine ^^


If I had my own business, I would run a lease business.
>>  correct!
First of all, It will give another chance to me to enjoy my life.

>>  First of all, it will give me another chance to enjoy my life.
 It is because I\'m interested in real estates and I can do well in this kind of business.

>>  correct!

I had studied about the law of real eatates.

>>  I studied the law about real estates.

It was very interesting to know about that.

>>  correct!

Also, I can work until old ages and I can have more free time comparing to other jobs.
>>  Also, I can still work even if I am old and I can have more free time comparing to the other jobs.
In addition, I want to work continuously. 

>>  correct! 
 It\'s really hard to work in companies until retirement age these days.

>>   It\'s really hard to work in companies until the retirement age these days.

 Most companies have difficulty in their business nowadays, so they want to reduce the expenses like wages.

>>   Most companies have difficulties in their businesses nowadays, so they want to reduce the expenses like wages. 

That\'s why they don\'t hire new employees and fire many workers.

>>  correct!

>> or: That is why they don\'t want to hire new employees and they fire many workers.

The economy condition in Korea is getting worse, so it\'s really hard to work in same place until retirement age.

>>  The economic condition in Korea is getting worse, so it is really hard to work in the same place until the retirement age.

I have to prepare my retirement from the present company, so I have thought about my own business.

>>  I have to prepare for my retirement in my present company, so I have already thought of having my own business.

 If I have my own business, I would do my best becuase the more I work hard, the more I can get a profit.

>>     correct! (because)

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