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Actually, I\'ve been writing my schedule and diary so far.
I write about my daily life and then I share my thoughts and feelings about it.
But if you ask me which of the two do I prefer, I prefer to write about my thoughts and feelings.
Because thoughts and feelings disappear in a blink of an eye, I think it is important to leave thoughs and feelings of that time. In addition, if you record an idea, it can be inspired by something and create something new, and it is important for people to express and relieve feelings rather than hide them, because it can be a stress. Therefore, I recommend writing as a way to express and resolve it.
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Actually, I\'ve been writing my schedule and diary so far.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Actually, I’ve been keeping a schedule and writing a diary.
I write about my daily life and then I share my thoughts and feelings about it.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I write about my daily life and also share my thoughts and feelings.
But if you ask me which of the two do I prefer, I prefer to write about my thoughts and feelings.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: If I had to choose between the two, I’d rather write about my thoughts and feelings.
Because thoughts and feelings disappear in a blink of an eye, I think it is important to leave thoughs and feelings of that time.
>> Because thoughts and feelings disappear in a blink of an eye, I think it is important to leave thoughts and feelings of that time.
>> Or: Since thoughts and feelings fade quickly, I think it’s important to capture them in writing.
In addition, if you record an idea, it can be inspired by something and create something new, and it is important for people to express and relieve feelings rather than hide them, because it can be a stress.
>> In addition, if you record an idea, it can be inspired by something and create something new, and it is important for people to express and relieve feelings rather than hide them, because it can cause stress.
>> Or: Recording ideas can spark new ones, and sharing your feelings is healthier than bottling them up, since holding them in causes stress.
Therefore, I recommend writing as a way to express and resolve it.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: So, I suggest writing as a way to release emotions and handle stress.
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